Hi my name is Troy. I am a year 8 from Ahipara school. I like surfing, skateboarding, running, swimming, and dogs. I love being outdoors and doing lots of fun, adrenaline things.
Hi there Troy, i'm Hannah. I am a student at Belfast school. Good job on your slide about you, I really liked how you added in the kind of stuff that you do outside of school. You are so lucky to live on a farm, I really want to live on a farm because I love being outside and being with animals. Maybe next time you could add in more writing and details.
Anyway over all I really liked it. Do you do any other sports? I do, I play: Netball, Touch, Do swimming and also I do Hip Hop Dance. :)
Hi,tory! It is luna X form belfast school.You are very good at introducing yourself, and you also write about what you are good at. Have you ever thought about introducing yourself to be more comprehensive and perfect? Next time you can write a little more in your self-introduction. Why do you want to write your own introduction?
hi this i tamzyn it is a very interesting story about your self
ReplyDeletefeedback. nice selection of words, they were nice and decriptive
ReplyDeletefeedfoward maybe try put more sentences in to make paragraphs
Hi there Troy, i'm Hannah.
ReplyDeleteI am a student at Belfast school.
Good job on your slide about you, I really liked how you added in the kind of stuff that you do outside of school.
You are so lucky to live on a farm, I really want to live on a farm because I love being outside and being with animals.
Maybe next time you could add in more writing and details.
Anyway over all I really liked it.
Do you do any other sports?
I do, I play: Netball, Touch, Do swimming and also I do Hip Hop Dance.
:)
I also do indoor football and swimming. Do you have any animals? we have cows, dogs, cats, bulls, horses and used to have sheep.
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ReplyDeleteHi,tory! It is luna X form belfast school.You are very good at introducing yourself, and you also write about what you are good at. Have you ever thought about introducing yourself to be more comprehensive and perfect?
ReplyDeleteNext time you can write a little more in your self-introduction.
Why do you want to write your own introduction?
Thanks Luna X I had to introduce myself so you will know me better. What else would you like to know about me
Deletedear troy maybe next time add detail but don't get to worried you did your best
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